Messed up Recount

LI: To correct certain structure and language features in a recount.
This week for writing we had to Fix up Mr Wongs messed up recount and make it into a good version. The first thing we had to do was make a copy of the messed up recount and  go to the paragraph we had to fix up. The paragraph we had to fix was paragraph 4 we had to fix up some of the words because it wouldn't make sense, why we had to fix up the bad version because the paragraph we had to do was we had to do paragraph structure. I learnt how to fix up the bad version and make my own copy and fix up the bad version to make it a good version.